my love's the ocean, your heart's the moon, by izzy Subscribe to rss feed for izzy

all through the misrey and pain
still together we shall remain 
and through the bad and through the good
we'll have the life i knew we should
it'd be so simple, so simple 
if they knew:

when we're together ,easily,
they drown themselves in jealsousy
life would never mean a thing
without your love i couldn't sing
i can't explain it, explain it
this is the only way:

i never felt this way, could this be real?
they say it's pupppy love, but it could be real
the way you walk, and how you look, and how you speak
when i spend time with you my day has reached it's peak
trying to explain my love, trying trying it all day
finally came up with something here's what i have to say:

my love's the ocean
your heart's the moon
when we get closer
they drown so soon
i'll hold on forever
never let you go 
and that is one thing 
i hope you'll always know
Posted: 2008-11-28 02:39:04 UTC

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2008-11-21 23:39:05Simply-Me-20104
Interesting format! It really works well with the overall flow! Very expressive and heartfelt and great word choice!

2008-12-18 15:09:25Tyler Cedric Golden
i like it very much indeed very well and the symbolism you used in showing feelings towards one another....splendid job....

2009-01-27 19:46:48Janjan
Dear Smeckledwarf: Very nicely done. Loved reading it. Love, Janjan xoxo

2009-02-11 01:56:51ma_chapa3xD
OMG!!! SPECKLEDWARF!!! that was AMAZING ILOVE IT!!! thx for your comment btw. keep on writing! with LUVE rachel frella ;)

2009-02-12 01:27:20ma_chapa3xD
im SO SORRy i spelled us name wrong this happens a lot with other thigs haha ya well keepon writing U ROX! ;) ~rachel

2009-05-02 08:17:27Gabrielle
very sweet! sounds just like love

2009-06-17 02:55:4211 Tragedy's
Maybe love is so far away, and love reflects their heart. Sometimes I think I'm in puppy love because I've written so many about different boys, but it all didn't work out =\

2009-07-26 05:45:06Lily
great job very intresting

2009-08-30 18:24:20adam greenleaf
its pretty good the way its written

2009-09-29 15:25:20Hannah George
Yeah Izzy, I love this poem it's relatable and true. Thanks for positive feedback on my poem.

2009-11-30 01:26:49Katelyn7
wow this is amazing!

2009-12-06 00:44:34~♥miss crazy♥~
its very good:)

2010-11-02 19:23:00Sarah
i like this one. and thanks for the comment