As the World Melts Away...

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By A <font color=turquoise><del>Person</del></font> •

All that we are, all that we pretend to be Just melts away Gaze into the night See the stars falling Catch them before they hit the ground It's all so beautiful, tonight Though we are losing ourselves But it's okay because This is how everything is meant to be As the night consumes us We hold hands and wish everything away And wake to the dawn Swallowing us Our minds slowly die But our hearts still beat strong Now we found where we belong

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January 19, 2009 22:54Natural_beauty_Ashe

very nice in my opinion

February 3, 2009 01:55Chalan

I liked this poem. But I don't think it was constructed right... the wording seemed a little scattered to me. It wasn't bad though.

March 8, 2009 05:45twinkle_t

I really liked this poem.

March 18, 2009 09:21Metamorphoser

nice combination coming from heart and mind but was it meant not to rhyme..

May 16, 2009 08:55sammya

its a lovely poem and you should do more!

May 16, 2009 16:29Your Everlasting

Good just like the other one you wrote!Keep it up!

July 26, 2009 22:13x--poison_pen--x

poems don't have to have structure!
i thought it was amazing XD

August 6, 2009 19:58♥ Leah ☺

this one is really good, so's ur other one. but, i prefer this one. just my opinion :)

October 1, 2009 22:20(darkkisses)

nice poem i really get it :) check out some of my poems and tell my what you think of them if you wont to my poems are a bit dark doe :) lol

November 7, 2009 20:36Amber

i really really love this poem. it's amazing. =]

May 5, 2010 01:35

This one IS a little bit better than your other one...but they are both very good!